Is it worth the risk?

1st May 2020, 7:05 AM in Chapter 37. A nice company!
Average Rating: 5 (4 votes)
Is it worth the risk?
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Valares 1st May 2020, 7:05 AM edit delete
Valares
Hello friends! Over the past few weeks it has been very difficult for me (and I imagine for you too) .. and because of that I have not had time and priority to be able to update the story. Therefore, for a while I will have to increase the update interval...


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Comments:

Valares 14th Apr 2020, 2:42 PM edit delete reply
Valares
Hitomi doesn't want to waste any more time and keep her Master waiting!
ShoShone 2nd May 2020, 9:53 AM edit delete reply
ShoShone
She's in a hurry to get back to her master to have more "mantra" with him. She wants him to "mantra" her brains out.



"I really don't like (and try to avoid) putting too much information on a page, as I think it risks getting too tiring to read. What do you think?"


In webcomics there can be a tendency for the story to get rushed. Sometimes the conveyance of important details can be vague. Such needs explanation.


On the prior page in frames four and five, the conversation is that Hitomi saved Niko. It's not said so specifically but the tone is a presumption that the werewolf spell for her is abolished. But then in frame six uncertainty is expressed. But then oddly no discussion of whether or not Niko will change back into a werewolf. As if it were no concern at all. As it it were settled.

Also, back in the rain, when asked about the werewolf Niko tells the cockroach she won't be a problem anymore.

Today it's not mentioned. Hitomi isn't worried about Niko going with her or changing. If she wasn't sure, she would be concerned and have questions. But no.


So, you're dropping hints. But you've contradicted yourself. And you're being vague.
Valares 2nd May 2020, 11:40 AM edit delete reply
Valares
Well..this was an excellent review! In fact, the theme of lycanthropy was forgotten in the conversation between them, sorry! I will try to fix this in the next chapters.
ShoShone 2nd May 2020, 9:12 PM edit delete reply
ShoShone
Well, she does want to hurry it up so as to get back sooner for more "mantra."
Oldarmourer 2nd May 2020, 10:08 PM edit delete reply
Oldarmourer
I'm fairly certain the author does not have English as a first language.
I'm also fairly certain that neither one of us speaks their language as well as they do English.
That's the price you pay for telling a story to the world in general and it's far better to sit back and enjoy something given to you freely than nitpick it apart.
ShoShone 2nd May 2020, 11:52 PM edit delete reply
ShoShone
So, English isn't your first language. That would explain why you always misunderstand what's going on.
Valares 3rd May 2020, 12:12 PM edit delete reply
Valares
Guys, I don't take offense with criticism of the work that I do here for free for you, really.

Feel free to flag inconsistencies or grammatical errors. In fact English is not my first language, sorry. It may not seem like it, but unfortunately my time to do this job has greatly reduced, and unfortunately my text review has worsened a lot.

Anyway, I appreciate the signs here and I will make the necessary corrections!

I prefer to see comments (even if negative) than none! :D
ShoShone 3rd May 2020, 7:47 PM edit delete reply
ShoShone
I wasn't talking about you just then. I was talking to the guy who kept butting in when I was talking to you. Every time he failed to comprehend what was going on. He's very confused.
Valares 4th May 2020, 8:44 AM edit delete reply
Valares
Anyway, he has a point, my English is not strong ... lol
If there's something weird or out of context, you can let me know. :)